qaralynn

hellooo XD This is a really good piece!! I love how it's short and straight to the point!! my criticism: You may think I'm shy in class, Quietly waiting for ...

heey this is a reall sweet poem and I love it. your friend captured that feeling very well. Now we are severed. Cut into two but there is still one ...

beautiful poem!! It's great! I love the rhyme in it and I especially like this part: Her sparkling eyes of blue, Have dulled to a simple gray, The life that ...

nice poem!!! you should consider to take out the comma's in the last sentence: I’m alone in this;You can’t see me, All you see is a “good, innocent, naïve, girl” ...

I like this poem! you should consider to maybe change -cryin'- into something that rhymes better When things tumble down around, Just keep your eyes on mine. I'll hold you ...

I like this write! but you should consider to rewrite: I opened my eyes this morning And most everything was just the same Except you weren’t there to hold my ...

love this! maybe you should leave out 'just' in the last sentence, because I think it would sound better.. So just in case he won't be listening I'll just take ...