piepiemann22

When I think about it it does conect to your story. Nicely done

This poem makes no sense. At the very least a poem sould speak from the heart and soul. This has no meaning or feeling to it. Give your next piece ...

I like it. It seems to speak from the heart like poetry should. Though I can't make out the moral. Though saying that I do get one thing from it. ...

I believe it's pretty good. Your begining was good, but it looks like you rushed through the ending. Out of knowwere a Lord of Darkness appears and he has no ...

Good, Very good,but there is one problem. Simon seems to take to his powers to easaly. He just all of a sudden believed in them. thats all I have to ...

not bad, better than anything I can write

You seem to write poety the way I do in some sense. At least this piece. you speak from the way you feel. though you make a lot better poem ...

If your turning this into a story then I realy like it. It makes sense that way. If not then okay, keep brainstorming ideas.

Nicely done. This sounds better as a chapter 1 than a prolouge anyway. keep up the good wok.

Nicely done. You left the reader gueesing to what just happened and you gave only the info you needed. Keep righting

I am a fan of Eregon myself. I belive this (poem) is exelent. It truely grasped the point you made. Keep up the good work.

Dude, I'm your friend, now trust me GET WRITING!

I only had to read a little bit, but so far so good. Keep going. when I have time I would like to read the rest.

nice but what happens before then