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Re: Alice is Waiting
Hey (: I really liked this, especially the description and the rhyme scheme. Most of this rolled right off the tongue. Dark poetry like this are some of my favorites. ...
Nov 21, 2011 -
Re: Blood on my hands(edited)
Hey there! I loved it. Aside from some grammatical errors, it was nearly perfect. It kept me interested the whole way through :) However I do think yous hould fact ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Ink-line
Hey! I thought this was a great first work, you're off to a good start. I'm a fan of your vocabulary-- it enhances your poem. First I thought I'd say ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Lost at Sea
Loved it. Gorgeous. It flowed perfectly, at least to me- I knew because I barely had to "read" it at all. It's like my mind just knew :D haha. Anyway, ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Falling in Love.....
Generally you gain experience by, well, experiencing it, witnessing it, absorbing it, licking it (kidding) etc. No one can tell you what exactly it's like to love. You have to ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Thunderstorms at home
Hola (: I love poetry and I love thunderstorms, so this was a catch! I thought it was decent but definitely needs some work. The first thing I noticed was ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: TimeKeeper
Here to review, finally. Please excuse my tardiness… I’ve been pretty busy these past few days. And as if he were Moses, everyone parted and walked away, not looking back. ...
Mar 21, 2010 -
Re: A Criminal's Heart-Prologue (REVISED)
Writer's note->Hi I had posted it before but then deleted it. It's rough and needs some serious work, I know. Just tell me whether you like the story or not. ...
Mar 19, 2010 -
Re: Yours Truly
Hola =D So, you don't have to be extremely precise about capitalizing. You don't capitalize every word in a sentence do you? XD So each and every single line doesn't ...
Mar 19, 2010 -
Re: Survive: Chapter One - Genesis
Hola! It feels good to be the first to review on a story! =D I just wanted to say, if you wish to post the whole thing at one time, ...
Mar 17, 2010 -
Re: The Robyn Academy ~ Chapter one, part one [edited]
Hola! Peanut, here to review ^^ I’m not going to be reading the other reviews until I complete my own, so if I repeat something they already said then you ...
Mar 16, 2010 -
Re: Balema, A world of many elements - Chapter 1 - The Story
Hello! =D So... yes, I agree with Snoink. I kept wondering when the story would begin. It seems like all of this is just one big confusing info. dump. Perhaps ...
Mar 15, 2010 -
Re: 4 minutes
Hola. So the first paragraph is a major info. dump. Spread it out gradually, so it's not like; "Sothecat'snamewasMewersandshewasblackandshe'sstuckinatreeandblahblahblah..." I didn't actually find this
Mar 15, 2010 -
Re: Shades of Violet(4)[death]
Hola! Here to review. Sorry I'm late at reviewing this... I've been incredibly busy, and recently, sick. I'm also sorry if I repeat what some other people have said. I ...
Mar 14, 2010 -
Re: Finding me back-Prologue(Final edit) Please re -read
Hola! So I'm here as requested. Pardon me if I repeat what some of the other reviewers have said here. I'll write my own and then I may read what ...
Mar 8, 2010