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I didn't thank you for your comment. It was very helpful. English isn't my first language and I suppose I still have issues with grammar. I'm also still not always ...

I'm hooked. I want to know if he is really crazy. I want to know what he knows, or thinks he knows. And I don't care if he is crazy ...

I won't repeat what the others said about the chatty beginning but I do have a comment about your dialogue. The problem, I think, is that you haven't yet decided ...

It felt very short. I don't know why. I like how you start building Susie's character right from the first paragraph. Something just felt inconsistent. For what little is said, ...

Hi. First of all, I'm curious to read the rest. For now, it's a little all over the place - home, work, Sofie, Lisa - but I'm confident I'll get ...

Thanks. I'm very glad you took the time to leave a comment. And thanks for being so kind. Since English isn't my first language, I'm always worried my dialogue will ...

I liked it. The way Caine swoops in, it's like he is a superhero. But it's weird that he isn't more surprised about the whole I-killed-my-last-boyfriend thing. I mean, it's ...

Thanks, Omnom. I thought I was a peeping Tom for looking through people's windows imagining their lives. Now, I know I'm not a voyeur. I'm a writer.

I liked it. Molly has a very bright personality and her relationship with Becca seems cool. I'm sure she'll end up being one of those supporting characters you just have ...

It was awesome. I put an abusive relationship in the book I'm trying to write but I didn't capture the victim's feelings the way you did. And yet, I like ...

I loved. I want to read more!

This reminds me a lot of the novel Divergent, and it's not one of my favorite books. I do get why it could influence you, though. I remember reading an ...

I'm sorry I had trouble following the story because of your organization. I think it kind of spoils it. I would be happy to re-read it if you could just ...

I think there might be some grammatical issues but English isn't my first language so you'll have to look elsewhere for help with that. Now, about your writing, I rather ...