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You are a beautiful writer. It was exquisite, and that's not a word I use very often. I loved the metaphors you used, especially the "But now the clouds are ...

The edits I have are done, so I can just talk about what I liked about it! I loved the flow of it, and the very interesting concept of light ...

I can't relate to this at all. What is the 13th at the lake? I have no idea what you are talking about. Make it a lot more relateable. I ...

This absolutely horrible, but you could make it worse. You could say when the princess met the prince something along the lines of "When the princess saw the knight, she ...

Like Ilovebubbles said, it lacks emotion. Some parts of it lack realism. If my mom would have let me sat in the passenger seat when I was five, then she ...

It's too short to give a good review on this. The first three sentences pulled me in. The visual was good, but you could extend that. The fourth however pulled ...

This is a very moving piece. Enviromentalist, no? Apologizing to the ducks drew my attention at first and you kept it all the way until the end. Yes, the knowledge ...

Haha, I love it. Especially, "Bane? Really?" I think a lot of people have that trouble. It's so true about writer's block. You really have to be really creative to ...

This is really deep and moving. I can relate to that perfectly. I loved the visual of sliding everything back into place. The thing I enjoyed was the repitition you ...

I think you should have expanded on this poem. It is hard to imagine why the person would think they are ugly on the inside. Use some metaphors to get ...

Personally, I like it. It's blunt and a bit childish. That's what I like about it. There aren't any grammatical mistakes I saw, nor spelling, so either you did well ...

I can understand this a lot and I think it was very good. To people who have been in these types of relationships, it's an easy poem to understand. A ...

This is a very moving and slightly upsetting story to me. The first paragraph confused me at first, but now I understand it. It caught my attention and drew me ...

(Please excuse me but because I am lazy, I won't pull quotes from this.) Let's start with the dissection before I give my overall opinion. The first four lines, I ...

Well, this woman definitely have OCD. I love your wording in this. It gave me that haphazard, crazy sense in this. I learned a new word from this! I don't ...