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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: New Eyes.

    It is very moving. I liked how you used the concept of colour blindness to show the way that the past distorts your vision. It is very true. When people ...

    Sep 27, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: La Petite Mort

    I'm a bit twisted, but I love this poem. Part of me wanted to look away, but the part of me that liked it read it again. I liked your ...

    Sep 26, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Singing Red

    Short, sweet and to the point. I read a bit in depth on this and it made me a bit sad reading it. It tells me about loneliness and how ...

    Sep 26, 2011

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: The spark

    It went way too fast. I didn't see the story behind it very well. Actually, I saw the beginning of one, but then you went to the ending. What about ...

    Sep 23, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: A Love to Last Forever

    Hi! I hope you're having a nice day because I believe I might ruin that now. I am not a Christian, honestly, but I do feel this way about my ...

    Sep 23, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: I'm Tired

    This is a very interesting poem. I really liked the flow of it and I could tell the pain it took to write that. I like the structure of the ...

    Sep 21, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Heartbreak

    This sounds cruel, but it sounds rather boring. It's lacking that flavor or substance to a poem. I agree with the first reviewer; it's too short. I would add more ...

    Sep 21, 2011

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: I Hate Math... and I Hate the Library

    Man, this was actually pretty good! I think you edited it before I read it, and there were no problems with reading it, at least for me. I liked that ...

    Sep 15, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: The Truth

    Wow. Just whoa. This poem is completely beautiful, and I don't say this lightly. This points out what I am feeling, and I actually felt some fear in my stomach. ...

    Sep 12, 2011

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Lipstick on His Collar

    Wow! This is really interesting. It is not simple at all in my opinion, but very easy to see. I thought I would see a lot more anger in this, ...

    Sep 12, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Of Fire and Shadow

    I absolutely enjoyed reading this. The imagery was wonderful and I can imagine my friends and I doing this while camping. I hate punctuation, and it's not necessary in this ...

    Jul 31, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Heaven's a bad place to be

    It's a bit dull. I agree with LiesOnLies. I would have liked it if you would have expanded on it all instead of that repitition. Sometimes it's good to use ...

    Jul 30, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: tongue

    Hello! I really enjoyed reading this poem. The imagery was rather magnificent. However, what drew me away was the fact that there was little punctuation and capatilization. Here's my edit ...

    Jul 30, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: White flag

    Very interesting and original. I also love the comparison. Though I'm not sure how your friemds could be slain during love, but I can imagine it. I love the last ...

    Jul 30, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: This is not the name of the story (chapter one)

    It's interesting. It just doesn't follow a journal format. He wouldn't know beforehand that the end of the world was coming. If it already happened then he would have stated ...

    Jul 30, 2011


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