originalhobbit

This is pretty adorable, especially the last line. My favorite line is the second, when you're saying it's not the end. It's Great for being written by a seven year ...

It's really interesting and I like it. Very interesting choice of words with ambrosia and anemone.

I liked it a little, but it seemed to run on for days. The amount of commas in this poem makes it seem much, much longer than it is, and ...

I love the advice, and I'll definitely take it into the consideration. The only reason this poem doesn't have a specific rhythm to it is because I was trying to ...

I really like that the poem isn't entirely happy. I think it makes the words seem more real and less forced.

I like the repeating pattern and the good rhymes.

Thanks for the good reviews and constructive criticism. I wasn't expecting people to like this, since it was an experiment of mine, but I appreciate that it was well-received

I think it's a really good poem.