olivia1987uk

Hey again you! I thought it was only fair to repay the favour! PRECLUDE ...means to make you mean PRELUDE? One soul was not meant to be possessed by two ...

How odd! Lol! I do really like it in an odd way the "LOL" at the end included in the piece or is it just your reaction to your tongue ...

Hello hello hello! I am presuming this is just the first installment...? lol...hope so! I'd like to see where this i going.... Just a few things I have picked up ...

Other than being confused about the narration, I think this is a really good piece...I am very much intriguedto read more, put it that way... In the first paragraph change ...

Hello my dear! Hope this review is helpful to you! He looked celestial under the sunlight, his finely carved face, and full lips, dark lashes, all perfectly outlined by the ...

I know you already have loads of reviews on this, and this is really a testament to how good this piece is. I love the spacing, and the non sequiturs ...

Hey ashleylee! Nice idea...I haven't read it yet as I read and review bit by bit and then do a sort of general overview at the end, but being familiar ...

I really enjoyed this piece and I think it's something definitely worthy of submission.... There are no obvious mistakes I've noticed and I'm rather keen on your distant narration of ...

Hello hello hello!! How are we? Anyway, I'll crack straight on with this.... heard muffled sobs and a faint constant rustle sound. It should be "rustling" I heard this, but ...

Here again! Miss me? It literally is like thirty seconds since I did my last review bt hey, a girl can dream! I'm waffling, so here goes... A hot shower ...

I'm here...feel kind of honoured that I've been especially requested! Get me! Hahaha! No mistakes as far as I can see so nothing to "critique" as such on my part...other ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! There are a few rules here and really, before you post you work, you should have done two reviews and try to keep the ratio at ...

I love it, but like we both said, not point in critiquing it properly as such! You have a really interesting life and your take on it is what I ...

Hey I know you said you didn't need a crit but I am gonna say i really enjoyed reading it! There weren't mistakes as such, but I did notice a ...

Argh! If I hear these names once more I think I will scream! If I were you, I would change them just so people take your piece more seriously! his ...