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Hey, if you don't mind, could you just show the first chapter for now? Because us at YWS tend to get discouraged with looooooooooooooong works. You'll learn that quickly. Oh ...

Yeah, I can tell you didn't put too much into the actual poem. ... At least I hope you didn't. 8-[ You can lose the "u." The playful AOL lingo ...

This was interesting. Good in some ways, not so good in others. First, the title. Really, "Unrequited Love" is just way to familiar to my ears. I think that you ...

This didn't really take my breath away. I mean I know how graduation's feel and how bittersweet goodbyes are, but I couldn't seem to feel it in this. However, a ...

You really got your message out with this one. Nice job. The only thing that I don't like is how you ended this. It was too ... well I'm not ...

Just for the record, this was my brother. He probably won't ever post again, but, whatever. Yeah, sometimes I agree with him, sometimes I don't. He can be a real ...

This is my favorite so far of your material. It reminded me of lyrics from a The Mars Volta song. (which is good to remind me of) Soooo ... what ...

Okay, when someone hears "I walk this lonely road," what dose one who has listened to a radio even just once almost instantly think. ... :idea: :P *Gasp* could it ...

Okay, yeah, I can dig the lyrics. Nice work. But I should suggest just one thing to you. A bridge. It needs a bridge. The same two things ove and ...

I was in fifth grade and I was walking back to my homeroom from P.E. In the hall I heard some shadows of what had gone on. So then I ...

This is just as good as all the others, but just one thing. If you copy and past something from a word processor, then you can press the "pre" button ...

Hey this was a pretty good poem. I just dropped by to say that I started cursing when i was in, like first grade (literally). It's become as hard to ...

This was pretty depressing. if i step outside my doorway, i stumble i fall, i crash, i burn, i break I think you should revise these lines because crash and ...

Wow, this was great. I don't know, it was just the way you wrote it that made it good. I'm not sure why it was so good, it just was. ...

I've never seen much of your work here, so you've probably answered this question, like, one too many times, but, what kind of band are you in? Anyway, onwards to ...