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I LIKE THIS SO MUCH. There, said it. Now that that's out of the way... I don't have any real critique for you. This was plainly awesome, in my mind. ...

This was interesting. Rather confusing, too. The first part reminded me of a birthday, and then when the MC notices things, I realized it was a baby, learning about the ...

The end gave me goosebumps. It's a... nice short story - creepy, indeed. But I thought it was a bit too obvious at times, such as, "Just let me be ...

As long as you make sure this isn't even more cliche... then I suppose it's all right. There's not much development in the plot in this chapter, except that Serena ...

I read it while laughing. I like it. It's not ordinary - there are no descriptions, as you might have noticed :) - but it was very good, in my ...

Hi there! First off, I really like your pic. I have the same goal :D Let's start with me liking it. I mean, really, really liking it. It's very good ...

I liked it. I thought we [the readers] didn't get to know the MC enough, but then, we're going to see more of her and it's just the begining, so ...

This was just great! I absolutely loved it! It had a nice flow to it, the descriptions were lively enough for this point of view, and we [the readers] got ...

Awesome. It was different, and very interesting, the plot was great too. I really like your writing1 I got to feel the MC through his thoughts [he's unintentionally funny!] and ...

It was.... a bit over the top but very funny indeed. I really really liked the part he rambles on, especially about Esme ["I mean, what is that about ?"]I ...

Fixed already pointed out the parts that don't fit in, so I don't have to do that - on to the poem itself, then. I loved it. I generally love ...

You did have some spelling mistakes, almost all of them including "to". I think you meant "too". It was short - so it can't be considered a chapter. However, I ...

Your last line is the most used up line in the history of used up lines - I like it! It intruiged me - exactly what a prologue is intended ...

This was very interesting! There was one thing the matter though. Your commas were generally misplaced -sorry I can'tpoint them out right now - watch your grammar more carefully. I'm ...

I know you already got so many reviews, but I just have to say this. Wow. I loved this. It felt like I was there, like I could see it ...