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Thank for your review! No need to worry your review was really good ^_^ Also, do you feel that that anything would be lost if I changed to third person?

Thank you for your review! I never thought about many of the things you mention so it was really helpful ^_^

Thank you for your review! Yeah, Leah's character needs a lot of work because she's pretty much like that the whole way through the two books I have written so ...

Thank you for your review ^_^

That's okay :)

Hmm, this is something I struggle on as well so I don't know how much I can help. One thing I will point to you is the writing tutorials on ...

It makes more sense now, why she was there at the shard so quickly and why she was alone. I often read too quickly and don't take in implied stuff, ...

Oh, I thought she was a cop and I haven't got much of an understanding how this world differs from our own. Maybe referring to the gun as something other ...

I'm glad it was helpful ^_^

Thank for your review! Oh, I like the idea about the numbers, I'll try to see what I can do :)

Thank you for the review! I did think it would sound cool as a poem but I have never written one before so I don't know if I could do ...

Yeah, I will probably have to buy a screenplay writing help book to see how I can go about solving it. Online only gives you so much and a lot ...

Thank for your review! I have never been through anything like this so it can be difficult to truly understand what it's like so thank you for giving me more ...

Thank you for your review! I'm glad like it, I tried hard to make sure it was realistic and characters were supportive so I'm happy it paid off ^_^

Ah, thank goodness, I always get scared people will take it the wrong way. The chapter split makes sense, I did wonder because it ended abruptly. I will try and ...