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Wow. You are really talented. I like the part where there's a confession. If this were something that you wrote about that was true I would suggest giving the "Miss ...

There is quite a few creative lines here. Like 'Nightmares are dashed upon the rocks,' Of all those bird-hearted spirits,' and 'Storm-tossed souls such as I.' I wondered about how ...

Love lies? Do you mean a lie, as in not honest, or as in laying? If you mean the former, then that's not true. This reminds me of Romeo and ...

I loooooove this poem. Everything rhymes, its great. I think poems don't have to make sense, since I can't make any sense of it, anyway. There isn't anything in here ...

Acrostic? I've never heard of it, but the poem is really, really, really good. I'd like to know what your supposed to be listening for, at the last sentence. I ...

First of all -- hi. I like this poem because there's a unique pattern with the redundant words you used to describe the general sounds of the footsteps, wind, et ...

Hello there. I'd like to say that I have no idea whether this is a diary entry, but then I didn't read your chapters prior to this one. There are ...

You typed this like you were rushing, and misspelled a lot of words. I enjoy mystery, no matter what kind, as long as its not too revealing. In this case ...

Hello. You must be a new member, so welcome to YWS! In some dialogue where you put commas, there should be periods. For example, one of the sentences should be ...

There is hardly any error in this story except the introduction. It wasn't clear who was talking. Fane sounded like a hill billy, which was funny. Actually all the characters ...

There are some things here that don't make sense to me, but its at least detailed enough to project a picture in my mind. So the narrator is a cat. ...

Because I messed up my first review, I now have to change this one. And so, I will give a very short comment about... Your paragraphing. Every time someone else ...

I was confused at first when she/he wanted to be like the others the narrator despised, but I kinda get it, how she/he would prefer to fit in than be ...

If I were the main character (I wish you included his name, or described his person,) I wouldn't care what she thought of me, because she obviously isn't a good ...