Hi, I am Knight Teen, of the Green Room Knights, here to review your poem.
Okay, I am absolutely obsessed with Shakespeare. As in, I would marry the guy if he was alive and available. MAAN is one of my favorites, I have it memorized. So you get major brownie points for that.
As I sit, sleep teases me
The sun radcinquepace*
s grandeur
Over the Earth insects
As my eyes lick the room
Okay, while I understand the first line, the others draw a blank. What are you trying to illustrate here? And my spellcheck is telling me that the word I indicated is misspelled, but it won't give me the definition and since I don't know this word and where it is misspelled I can't look it up.
Her powers of beauty are medicinable to me
This is misspelled, unless it was intentional.
I think that the two biggest issues that you have (besides being totally awesome) is that you are severely lacking in punctuation and stanzas. These things help create a sort of rhythm, but not every author likes them in their work.
If that is your case, then please ignore me. Knight of Reviewing only here to help.
But seriously, if you show this to Miss Right, I highly doubt that you will die a bachelor. The way you manipulate your words to be so beautiful is amazing.
KT
PS: You are the recipient of my 250th review! Thanks for earning me another Star!
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