nosirrah123

This was a gripping story. I admire the thought that went into the construction of such a detailed world with languages, cultures, and even hints of social classes. The descriptions ...

3 small notes before I give my general impressions of this story. 1. IMO this should be age-restricted to some degree. There's a lot of implied sexual activity and it'd ...

Was this the song?: I love the world building in this. It gives you just enough of a taste of the world to tease you into wanting to learn more. ...

I always come into poetry that reeks of teenage angst with a helping spoonful of skepticism, but I was forced to abandon that cynicism because of how well done this ...

Though I am by no means a poet, I have a few criticisms for you: 1. Religion does not rhyme with delusion. 2. There isn't much of a rhythm to ...

This was a well-made short story, but something just didn't click for me. I'll try to explain why. Firstly and most importantly, I believe that the "strings" metaphor was too ...

I was browsing through the green room when the title of this story caught my eye, and I thought I might give you some technical advice! I'll write out things ...

Before I start my review, I should say that I haven't read the previous chapters of this book. After reading this, I might though! I have few significant negative things ...

Why is everything written in all-caps? It makes this difficult to read without imagining all of the people shouting. There are a couple instances of confusing word choice in this ...

While I disagree with the content present in this piece, I still want to give you a fair and technical review so that you can learn to better express your ...

I like this short story, but it flowed poorly and as a result was difficult to follow. There are several factors that contributed to the weak structure that your story ...

Hello! To preface this review I would first like to state that overall I would consider this a good piece of literature. However there are some details that need to ...

There are many problems with this, but I'm going to be as helpful as I can and give specific, constructive criticism. Don't think I'm shooting you down, I'm just trying ...

Wow! I'm very impressed by this work. You very naturally and seamlessly jumped between dialog and a character's reaction to said dialog. I want to give you some critical feedback ...

Hello, I'm nosirrah. I just joined the site a few minutes ago, but as a fellow aspiring author I thought I should give you my input before I called it ...