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My main problem with this is punctuation! I think for some poems it's okay to go light on the punctuation, but in the case of this poem, the lack of ...

I read this a few days ago and have been meaning to get back. I'd first like to say, what's with the preface? you sound like you have a major ...

I have to say, I think this is really genius. It's so real. I had a friend like this. First she had depression and they were going to move to ...

Good job. You are a great storyteller. However, this doesn't seem much like a poem to me. It seems more like prose that you broke up into 4-line stanzas. For ...

I love this, especially the last stanza. The way it doesn't rhyme really works with the words themselves to create a feeling of melancholy. It is a bit startling that ...

I like this poem. Why do I stop being me, If it’s me in love why do you see someone else? Punctuation: First line should end in a question mark, ...

Anna, I have to say I love this. The personification of Silence is surprising and pleasant to the reader & I like the language you use. I became somewhat wary ...

well hello there. i like this quite a bit. it's really disturbing to me, but in a nice catharsis-type literary way. Some nitpicks: As I stand and watch your tears ...

Wow. Really beautiful and kind of bizarre in a lovely way. I want to be in this setting. Let’s make a nest in the sun amongst the tall grasses towering ...

well now, these crits above me are rather nasty, now aren't they? Okay, I just did some research on halo. master chief is the main character, and the brute chieftain ...

This is really interesting. You have great ideas! Once I had to write a descriptive paper about cowardice. It's really hard to think up good metaphors, but I like it. ...

I really like this. I like the relationship of the two stanzas. It's an experience for the reader. It demands a second reading, and that is a very good quality. ...

I love this so much that I'm almost beside myself. The images are beautiful. I think it has some problems, but every suggestion I come up with would take away ...

I like this. It makes me think of an old grey man who has had a prolific writing career and is now a washed up, sickly hermit. However, I would ...

I feel humbled giving you any criticism. I love the mood of this piece. The descriptions are just amazing. Personally, I love fragments and I like your use of them. ...