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i agree with Misinterpreted (i think was was his/her name) i also believe that the first few lines seem a little clished(clee-shade) hmm...overall, i think the poem started a little ...

that didnt really make me cry. but it was well written. i think you captured those kinds of feeling well :) .

wow that is short almost scarily short but it is pretty good. (just like this comment lol)

WOW. thats all i can say cause thats the weirdest thing ive ever read. but yeah, its pretty good, i suppose. are all your poems this weird?(this does not require ...

thanks, jabber, helpful as always. yes i know the original version was kinda terrible. :? yeah I changed the plot a lot, i think for the better. and when i ...

i like ben 10 and it sounds cool and stuff. i want to know why ben is evil though. ill stay tuned

yeah...okay....sounds interesting...go check out my SW fanfic....!!!!!!!!The Almega Galaxy:Corruption's the name

its Bespin, not Bespen, just to let you know... :) sounds good!! What time setting does it take place in?

wow,that was good! a good way to start the day of reading stories! The plot is developing well! loved it! i'll stay tuned. Z_

well, dynamo, it only gets better, i'll try to post ch. 4 over the weekend :D . timea....yeah, i sorta but not really get this show tell thing, i'll try ...

it sounds kinda funny, but good! no change needed :D

hmm....well, a few key words could change, not sure which ones, but otherwise it was good!!

must be the best poem i've read yet! hidden meanings and all...awesome!!!

he...great except that diet coke thing is kinda funny but random :)

you are right here, kitty, Cere and Kwest will be developed and flaws will develop in the next chapter with a major battle sequence :) I will use more smell ...