nilou-and-amani

This was really confusing! Don't get me wrong, i like confusing! I love reading random self contradictory pives of writing, and that's exactly what this is! Subtle sarcasm is good, ...

Amzing! Only i think that you should have given Aaron more time to open up. It's nicer when the audience see the characters slowly evolve. Also, i have said this ...

I loved it! It's extremely interessting! Aaron reminds me of this guy i know. Stubborn, careless and tries to be insensitive when he's really soft and mushy inside! It was ...

It was sooo good. You made a couple of minor mistakes, so just read over it carefully. I didn't really understand that part about the skinny locker. I also love ...

It wasn't outstanding but it was pretty good. You made good points and you suppoted them, so good job. You made some punctuation mistakes and somwehre in the middle of ...

It was absolutely beautiful!! You conveyed the eomtions very strongly. There were only a few minor mistakes, other than that i love it! I just absolutely love it! I love ...

At first, i didn't understand your poem, but then it mad sense when i read the top part. Your ideas are good, but you didn't convey them strongly. Read it ...

Overall it's pretty interesting and fun to read. You have some grammar mistakes and your language tends to become immature in some places. I suggest you read over it a ...

This is really goo. I love love the way you use imagery to convey your feelings. I think that you can make it more dramatic by adding a few commas ...

I really love how you catch the audience's attention in the beginning. The descriptions in the first couple of paragraphs were perfect- right amount, right tone right everything. But after ...

I really love this! It's beautiful. It flows really well, and i like how you convey your emotions so clearly and that there's still something behind it. It's a little ...

It's beautiful, and i love the meaning. Repition is good, but i think there is too much Repition in your poem. You can try using "May I have this dance?" ...