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I really like your style of writing. This left a bitter taste at the end. I really enjoyed how this poem flowed. Great job!

I really like this. I like that there is more of a focus on the words then who the character is. This is great I also really liked the flow ...

it was so quick. I know this is just a start to your story and i think you flow is nice but i would like so more detail. Keep up ...

i really could relate to this storty and that's what i enjoyed that the most. Your flow was good and i liked your word choices. Keep up the writing and ...

This was great. Can't wait till his new book comes out this month. Keep up the writing and the good work

I loved the depth and meaning you used in this story. I thought the flow was nice and that you were telling a great story. Over all i thought you ...

I really liked it. It had depth and meaning and i think you did a really great job. At first at though that this poem would have a rythm sceame ...

Is this meant to focus on the story so we nothing about these characters? Other than that i thought you story was good. Keep working at it

You have this story in first person but it doesn't seem like you are discribing her feelings at all. It seems like you put this story on fast forward but ...

i really liked your story so far and i'm interested to see what happens next.

good i liked it of course being a huge twilight fan and all

i like it keep writing i want to know what happens next

i really like it you seem to write exactly like Steph Meyer so i felt really conected i did find a few mistakes and they were corrected in the other ...

i like it and the flow of your words is nice. Something deep i really liked it good job

I loved the flow the words seemed to fit together. Your thought seemed constant like you knew what you wanted to write about. I love the emotions in this poem ...