The Rape of Erin Aghdra

A perfect perception of the horrors or rape. I have met many people who have been violated and they go through so much. I like the reference to Charles Dicken's Ms. Havisham in Great Expectations...even though I hated that book. I also like the lines where you talk about being forever trapped under his eyes. It was great. You did very well and I hope you continue to write and I will pray for you on this matter.

i like it and the flow of your words is nice. Something deep i really liked it good job

WOW!!! its story was compelling and just beautifully written!!

The rhythm was perfect and the point of the story was direct!

I love it!!!!

Keep on writing!!

Love, love, love it. It's so hard to write pieces with a proper rhythm, but you have mastered it! There were a few typos, which I changed below...

Among the symbols of my youth:
The wood, the steel, the stone,
I lay to hear the reasonance<I think you meant resonance>
Of my empty second home.
When at rest and meditation,
This place bares ghosts of old.
Growth now stands stagnant
Stunted from the cold.

The weather holds no bearing here;
The air is always chill. <it should be chilled, but that doesn't rhyme...one thing you could do is say 'the air holds a permanent chill' and change the previous line to 'the weather has no...'??? that would be my suggestion.>
Freezing with the sounds of shrieks,<just a misspelling>
High and loud and shrill.
Part of me was stolen here,
A part I can't retrieve.
So I wait ad infinitum <love this line! how did you come up with that???>
For respite unreceived.
Like the old Ms. Havisham,
I just can't cut the ties
That bind me here forever
Under his burning eyes.

All I am and all I was
Is drifting on the breeze,
So I will lay until I pluck
My old self from these trees

Wow, this was really cool. The tempo and the beat type are rarely heard these days, and I really appreciated the new stuff. , my only issue was I didn't know what all the words meant right off the bat, but that can hardly be helped. Keep writing, it's just down the street from 'There'. -Bird