naturesgirl

Hi WaitingForLife, wonderful wonderful job here. I am definitely intrigued. You've offered a good idea of the story to come, and established a strong voice for the narrator. Here are ...

Haha!!! This is absolute LOVE! I love the bold-face and enlarged font you used in the letter. "AND THEN". That really made me laugh. Great job, I really have nothing ...

Very nice! The first post really caught my attention. I admit, I was pretty confused after reading it, but this part cleared it up for me. I really like how ...

Wow. Amazing job!! You said this was inspired by a dream? A nightmare more likely! But absolutely brilliant. I really love how descriptive you got about Suzanne and her son, ...

Really great job! You provide such wonderful imagery in this piece, it feels like i'm there in the story. I think my favorite part of this work, was probably the ...

I didn't find anything i'd like to critique; I really enjoyed this story. It is indeed very tragic, and I'm sure a very realistic event for men fighting overseas. I ...

Hello! I'll go ahead and review as i read, okay? The man looked at her crossly, ignoring the truth in her words. Sure, the bar was looking a bit shabby, ...

I really, honestly enjoyed this piece, though I've never cared for this type of fiction before. :) Your description of the sisters delighted me, especially the sister-in-law. How subtle the ...

Hello again! Love the story so far! But I have a few more critiques :) Here we go! Waking up was never an easy thing to do for me, especially ...

This is such a sweet story! It had me "awww"-ing throughout the whole thing. :) But if you don't mind, I do have a few minor critiques: Lucas and I ...

Great job! It really makes me curious about this relationship: whether she is truly afraid of settling, or if there is more to it, especially since she pointedly rebels against ...

Hello! I really enjoyed this piece; I loved your description of Uncle Gerald. However, I noticed a lot of mistakes in punctuation and grammar. I assume you used fragments as ...

I really enjoyed this. I assume there's more coming? I really can't critique you on anything; and I would honestly feel bad for doing so since I'm new to this ...

This is great. I love the choppy, short sentences. Its a wonderful style tool. :) The introduction is very nice. I think you may have some grammar and spelling errors, ...

Perhaps she liked the view a little too much. Haha, now that is some priceless humor. I love it :wink: Great job!