mystogan

thanks again for your support and with the 'seemingly flat' landscape keep that in mind, there is a twist to that, you will see later. In a few chapters most ...

thanks for the comment, especially since it is the first, very encouraging for me

thanks for that, i will keep everything in mind, since this was the first piece it was difficult starting, but i have so much more of it planned out already, ...

oh sorry i did not even scroll down and see that you already made a comment regarding all this, so sorry, but again great poem

It is really interesting but i think you should make it longer, especially considering how there is a lot of dialogue. Also i think you should describe the characters more. ...

I like Zip, she is really interesting, can't wait to see what she gets up to