mystical*dragons

This was really good! I for one do not like poetry, but I really did like this one. I'm really sorry but I'm afraid I don't have any constructive criticism ...

Wow...beautiful imagery...you've just blown me away My favorite part: and the broken wings of dead dreams litter the earth, like leaves; However, the end did not work for me. I ...

I hate to be repititive but yeah I like the word 'asunder' too. I like this!! It's really nice and sweet. :)And yeah, I'm really bad at criticizing I'm afraid ...

Wow, first of all I just hope this isn't true. You asked me to critique this piece, so here I am :D They hate me, why? What I do I ...

I really like this, it's got a very poetic feel to it. I can hardly find anything to critic, this really is one of the nicest pieces I've read in ...

This is good, I can't wait to read more. There are a few typos, I think you need to go over it once. She sleeps in the springtime in hollows ...

“You lazy scoundrel, I’m firing you from the regiment. You’ve been so mopey (There’s no such word as mopey, I would suggest you use broody or sulky instead) and disobedient ...

(Welcome to YWS, by the way!) Yes, this is in the right section. I like this piece a lot, you have displayed the emotions really well. It almost has a ...

Okay...this is getting better and better! Just a few tiny mistakes "...she couldn't bare it" It should be bear, not bare. "You shouldn't be on deck" It should be "on ...

Sorry, I know this is kind of late, but I wasn't feeling well so I could'nt get to your story before. Chapter 1 Nefer has pretty much covered everything, so ...

I really liked this poem. I could definitely relate to the feelings portrayed. I'm afraid I can't critic anything in this poem because I find it so perfect. I know ...

Well, okay, your story has potential. But there are a few things you could change; that would perhaps make the story more interesting. First of all, I think you should ...

Well, this was an okay story. You write very well, the only thing is that you kept the story really confusing, which is good, to a point. The start was ...

Wow! I like this, its got style. It's a very direct poem, which I like. Here’s how it’s gonna work, Princess. He’s gonna be you’re Prince Charming first, But then, ...

This was good, i really liked it. It's nice and simple, which works for a story like this. My only suggestion is that you should expand a bit more on ...