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all considered, it has a really sweet topic, but i think that the verses don't flow quite right. what i would try to do is just read it aloud a ...

im a little confused as to how you mesured your stanzas.. they're all very caddywompus and cadenceless (i don't think that's a word) it seems at some times they rhym, ...

This is really beautiful, though im still a little confused as to what it's about.... in the stanza "Listen to the silence The world stopped turning The clocks stopped ticking ...

i love this poem! but, "though frightening be the trips" sounds a little awkward, and i would change" and if it shall falter" to 'and shall it ever falter' just ...

wow.. this is beautiful... even though I'm not at all a religious individual, this poem is really quite heart lifting, and gives me hope.. like *DaughteroftheMoon* said... i think that ...

wow.. i really like this poem!!!! it's really fun too read.. it kind of makes you want to just sit there and read it through aloud repetitively until your mother ...

um this is beautful,but i was just wondering, is it about a rape? cuz if not i would try to revise it so it sounds a little less like that ...

i love this like crazily!!!!! it's great! i love how it flows, i love the subject i love everything about it! it also sounds like you know alot about music.. ...

i must say that this is a lovely poem, simple and short, but this line That saying that so loud leaves one a target. i find is to long and ...

i really like this peom, it has good meaning, and good questions, that i do think that everyone, somewhere in there hearts want to know the answers too, even though ...

i find this poem interesting, no in a bad way though.. it's nice to read a poem about something other then love or death or abuse.. most poems i read ...

Life does go on, as we knew it would. All the pain we took, for the greater good. I think that this opening line was really powerful, it was simple, ...

A.L.I.Y.A. THIS IS SO FREAKING INCREDIBLE!!!!!!! I CAN'T EVEN TELL YOU hoW AMAZING!!!! i mean i knew you could write, but damn girl this is da BOMB!!!! you are a ...

this is a really beautiful poem!!!!!! i love it cuz i can totally empathize with the charecter! how were you inspired to write this?? i like how you used so ...

this is really lovely and touching.. it seems like you picked out the words carefully(even if you didn't) but i think you should try to come up with a stronger ...