all considered, it has a really sweet topic, but i think that the verses don't flow quite right. what i would try to do is just read it aloud a few times and edit it so that there are about the same amount of sylobles in each line. And i really mean read ALOUD it will helt you so much. I really like your poem though.. so cute XD! good work!
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