muffy

This is amazing:D, i really love the amount of detail in every scene. You have a great style of writing. I want to finish this!!argh! It seems to me that ...

aaaaggh! pardon the expression but, aggh! its so cute.lol stories like this always get me so i'll try to give unbiased critique. ok, i don't know what the plot is ...

its sounds cute so far, i like it:D. Just some some constructive criticism, i hope that you eventually go into depth of the story to a scene where you elaborate ...

i really like the plot! of course you should keep going,lol, i think this could be something thats not only a great read but shows what people miss out on ...

There is so much flow in this. I don't even think I could give you any useful critique. I really liked how this whole religious theme was tied in since ...

You have me interested for more:). I'd like to see more of how the main characters look. I really appreciate the attention to detal, thats the stuff that makes lil ...