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I don't know if I can wait til next Sunday :(. YOU EVIL!!!!! This chapter was so good, it was filled with so much suspense and scariness. WHY DO YOU ...

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Hi there! Oh my goodness, your writing skills blew me away! There are a few sentences that could use some work. The desert stretches far and wide to the north ...

Wow! I love the concept! Ok down to the nitty gritty details... :) 1) There's a place that seems to jump from one scene to another and it just isn't ...

Hi there! Interesting story. Ok now I'll get to the fix ups. 1) You have a few sentences that are a little long. She numbly scratches at another sketch, something ...

This plot line seems really amazing! The one line that describes your story really caught my eye. I have a few critiques, though. First off, this could be a great ...

Oh, Sage will be trouble! Ok now ask me: what was so good about this chapter? My answer is: Because it's so flibflappering funny! Ok, a few details. First, a ...

First off, never stop writing this story! Or else... I will find where you live and watch you sleep. Wait, I already know where you live. Mwahaha! Ok actually, no ...

You have the coolest names ever! I love the plot and the characters. Lastly, I'm impressed with the story line. I once tried writing about shapeshifters and it miserably failed. ...

Ok, I'm going to confess that I just started reading this story. Ok, phew now I feel better but oh goodness better tell me when there's a new chapter. I ...

This is a wonderful start! You have begun to layer a really great story! Now the critique part of my review. I think that you should look at run-on sentences. ...

I'm not sure if your still interested in writing more but... I WOULD LOVE TO KEEP READING IT!!! You have spun this world in a way to incorporate fantasy and ...

This all seems very mysterious and thrilling. I want to know more about the capsules and where they come from. Please keep writing! The only critique I have is that ...

Wow. I loved it. You wove sorrow, fear, and joy into one short story. Now that is a talent that I want to learn! There was only a few spots ...

I really ReAlLy REALLY love your story! It's something so new and refreshing. I love Rowen and her funny commentary. You truly are a talented writer. Now there were only ...