mizz-iceberg

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I see that you're new. I have to say adored your description, especially the first bit, it created a wonderful mood for the story. Fog ...

I'm in a great hurry, so I'll quickly review this. I'll probably come back and review again. But for now: “What is wrong with you?” Keri demanded as they made ...

You've got good emotions here but the descriptions are rather bland. Your words feel more like definitions. Thrill me, make it bold. Use more imagery, include your reader. I'm going ...

I really, really liked this. It made me tear up. The emotions were very vivid and overall this story really touched my heart. Still, my little heart could sense it; ...

Wow. This was a short but really deep poem. To tell you the truth I've always wondered about death in this way. Ermm... as for the nitpicks, nothing major that ...

No No. No need to re-think the whole thing. I think this is an amazing start to a novel. Very exciting and thrilling. The descriptions were great, though I would ...

This is rather short so I can't say much. Even though it's quite short it caught my attention and it was quite interesting. I hope you continue this. Just a ...

Hey there Red Panda! I have to go somewhere quickly but this story caught my eye and I'll try to make this review quick. I'm not going focus on punctuation, ...

Ok one quick thing. I'd love to read this as it sound very interesting. But you need to space this out into paragraphs... double space them. Its one huge block ...

Hello There! Is this an excerpt of some sort? Well I rather enjoyed it as the emotions were well brought out and the bits of imagery were refreshing. The font ...

Nice poem. I didn't find it too preachy though I think add more imagery and emotion to this piece. If rhyming the poem is causing a hindrance in anyway for ...

Cute. I could actually relate to this as I've often fallen for guys who are clueless to even what my name is :S. Overall I found the grammar okay. Just ...

Hey there! I usually don't read fantasy but this caught my eye and it was quite interesting. OK, let see, this piece here is in bad need of editing and ...

Hey Chernobylly! I'm going to quickly point out the things I noticed. I would have done a nicer longer review but I'm in a hurry. I really enjoyed this story ...

You have great ideas in this poem and I see a lot of potential in it. The problem is the lack of rhythm and imagery. You need to make each ...