That’s what you evoke in me
You’re strong and kind
Yet I hide from you
There needs to be some sort of punctuation mark after "silence." This follows for the rest of the poem.
For all your skills I wish you’d see
The shy girl watching from a distance
Yearning to know you
Clueless seems a bit weak (and negative). Try finding another word. Perhaps "perplexed"?
Most of this is telling so it's a little drab. Try thinking of unique ideas that will spice it up.
Hope this helps,
- Summerless
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