miyaviloves

If you are basing this on a big brotehr experiance they are not allowed paper or anything to write with! Other than that little detail, i hope to see more.

Yeah i get what you mean by the 'chunky-ness' lol, and im now currently looking into re-writing it! Thanks for your comment! p.s. The last enrty isnt supposed to make ...

The friendship that blossomed between Yoshi and Kyoto was a rare one. From the first lesson they had spent together Yoshi had not wandered from Kyoto’s side. Kyoto thought it ...

Chapter one Kyoto sighed heavily. It was only third period yet all his energy had been pulled out of him. Not that Kyoto was a particularly energetic person anyway, in ...

I agree with the above comment, its good but very hard to read, and it needs some tweaking, but well done!

Hmm...well i cant really cut down the characters cos its a fanfiction from a film :\ and i am not involving some of them! Final fantasy can be verrrry confusing ...

Too short i kinda felt like it should be part of something more? Other than that its very good, but maybe add it onto something?

I like how it all flows together. I love it!

This is weird. Well they do say that talking to yourself is the first sign of madness! :)

This is very strange! BUt i liked it, its very different to anything i have EVER read, although there dosent seem to be much of a story to it?

I did like this, although reading through it, i do think that you could make it much better than it already is. What is the pain that you are talking ...

Reno fiddled with his long red hair as Rufus rambled on about something he was completly uninterested in. Tseng sighed as his friend took no intesrest in the topic, and ...

This poem made me feel really..cold? It seems very deep and really emotional, well done its extremly good

This is very good, is there a message in it? Even if there isnt i xreally liked it, and im now gonna go read more of your stuff :)

This is good, although i would like to see more description of the characters. Do you have any more?