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  • Poetry » Fantasy, Lyrical Re: them

    I see how it would make more sense as a short story. Thank you so much! If you'd like to read an edited version, go here:

    Fri May 29, 2015 4:48 pm
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Lyrical Re: them

    Thank you for this flattering and helpful review! If you'd like you can read the edited version of the poem here:

    Fri May 29, 2015 4:45 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: burning beauties

    Thanks for the review! Yeah, I could've edited it a little more.

    Thu Mar 20, 2014 11:47 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Life Cycle

    Oh I understand. I guess that title was a little vague and open ended for what I actually wrote. I could have narrowed it down.

    Mon Sep 16, 2013 6:01 pm
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Life Cycle

    Uhm you don't have to be rude about it. A poem you don't like isn't a personal affront to you. This poem is about something that I went through, I ...

    Mon Sep 16, 2013 5:54 pm
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: The White Canvas

    What's interesting about this poem was the sort of empty feeling it left me with. Like there could be more added to it. I don't know if you did it ...

    Wed Jun 26, 2013 2:25 am
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Samodiva

    In the beginning of this, I was a little confused as to who which characters were which. Just make it a little clearer because they all have same-sounding names. You ...

    Sun Dec 04, 2011 7:23 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Teen Assassin

    This goes very fast. There's no room to get to know the character, or to really understand the story. I understand that this is 'short stories' but this was a ...

    Mon Oct 24, 2011 6:02 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Give and Take

    I really liked this. I liked the way you described the woman, and how easily the reader could understand her. You could see her life, her fears, everything. All without ...

    Mon Oct 24, 2011 5:39 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Shatter

    This was pretty good, although like the first reviewer, I don't completely understand what you're talking about. If you want to, you can add details to make the symbolism more ...

    Thu Aug 11, 2011 4:34 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: A Proper Farewell

    This is okay, but the moral is unclear. Maybe it needs a rewrite? I didn't really get the fact that he buried the fish, only that he had forgotten about ...

    Tue Jul 19, 2011 4:28 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: High Stakes

    I love this a lot, but I wish I could know more of what the speaker was talking about. It was really good, though. I especially liked the first paragraph. ...

    Mon Jul 18, 2011 9:23 pm
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Privileged Few

    You wrote your descriptions very well, and this is a good story. It's so very realistic and I like how you left the problem out of it, so we don't ...

    Sun Jun 26, 2011 11:18 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: My Father was Buried

    This story was good, albeit a little disjointed. I was confused with the second "flashback", and I thought he had come back to life. The ending was nice though, and ...

    Wed Jun 22, 2011 3:00 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Your Good Isn't Good Enough (contest)

    I thought this was really good and well organized. I liked how the whole end half of the story was just a foolish prediction, and I liked the little plot ...

    Sat Jun 11, 2011 10:01 pm


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