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Re: them
I see how it would make more sense as a short story. Thank you so much! If you'd like to read an edited version, go here:
Fri May 29, 2015 4:48 pm -
Re: them
Thank you for this flattering and helpful review! If you'd like you can read the edited version of the poem here:
Fri May 29, 2015 4:45 pm -
Re: burning beauties
Thanks for the review! Yeah, I could've edited it a little more.
Thu Mar 20, 2014 11:47 pm -
Re: Life Cycle
Oh I understand. I guess that title was a little vague and open ended for what I actually wrote. I could have narrowed it down.
Mon Sep 16, 2013 6:01 pm -
Re: Life Cycle
Uhm you don't have to be rude about it. A poem you don't like isn't a personal affront to you. This poem is about something that I went through, I ...
Mon Sep 16, 2013 5:54 pm -
Re: The White Canvas
What's interesting about this poem was the sort of empty feeling it left me with. Like there could be more added to it. I don't know if you did it ...
Wed Jun 26, 2013 2:25 am -
Re: Samodiva
In the beginning of this, I was a little confused as to who which characters were which. Just make it a little clearer because they all have same-sounding names. You ...
Sun Dec 04, 2011 7:23 pm -
Re: Teen Assassin
This goes very fast. There's no room to get to know the character, or to really understand the story. I understand that this is 'short stories' but this was a ...
Mon Oct 24, 2011 6:02 pm -
Re: Give and Take
I really liked this. I liked the way you described the woman, and how easily the reader could understand her. You could see her life, her fears, everything. All without ...
Mon Oct 24, 2011 5:39 pm -
Re: Shatter
This was pretty good, although like the first reviewer, I don't completely understand what you're talking about. If you want to, you can add details to make the symbolism more ...
Thu Aug 11, 2011 4:34 pm -
Re: A Proper Farewell
This is okay, but the moral is unclear. Maybe it needs a rewrite? I didn't really get the fact that he buried the fish, only that he had forgotten about ...
Tue Jul 19, 2011 4:28 pm -
Re: High Stakes
I love this a lot, but I wish I could know more of what the speaker was talking about. It was really good, though. I especially liked the first paragraph. ...
Mon Jul 18, 2011 9:23 pm -
Re: Privileged Few
You wrote your descriptions very well, and this is a good story. It's so very realistic and I like how you left the problem out of it, so we don't ...
Sun Jun 26, 2011 11:18 pm -
Re: My Father was Buried
This story was good, albeit a little disjointed. I was confused with the second "flashback", and I thought he had come back to life. The ending was nice though, and ...
Wed Jun 22, 2011 3:00 pm -
Re: Your Good Isn't Good Enough (contest)
I thought this was really good and well organized. I liked how the whole end half of the story was just a foolish prediction, and I liked the little plot ...
Sat Jun 11, 2011 10:01 pm
