mim

wow.... i think you dealt with a very difficult and sensitive issue in a good way. I especially liked, not only the final sentence, but the fact that Draven called ...

i havent got much to say to be honest but i liked this piece. I chuckled a few time hehe. Anyway, can't wait to see more of your work. Keep ...

i liked this too... very good and definetly something i've never read before. Hope you post more soon mim x

i agree with nate - make this longer and develop more fully and it could defineitly (sp?) become something even more dramatic, not sure if that's the word but I'll ...

I like this loads and i agree with Carsand Guitars.. it is uniquely written ands i love it! mim x

well now I've learnt something new!! thanx

WOW!!!

I too tired to say much about your piece at the mo BUT i loved it! I hope you continue it... i'll be upset if you don't! lol mim x

I like this. To be honest i don't really know what to say. Its weird yet compelling. Just one thing though i think you spelt compliment wrong. mim x

I like this -especially the poem at the beggining. I think its a very unusual yet intriguing way to start a story. I don't really have much to say about ...

Thnx for pointing that out penny - i never thought of doing that hehe (shows how much help i need on my character development don't it!) Thanx for your comments ...

I ain't much of an expert on poetry but - i loved it! mim x

i just wanted 2 say that i was also kinda compelled to read the letters. I thought they were really cool and dead interesting. You should defo put some more ...

i disagree with dreami... i think that that last line is amazing and i feel it actually adds to the poem instead of detracts from it. I feel that it ...

I loved your writing.. i was totally engrossed and i think you should definetly continue it. I especially loved the phrase 'mortals seem to be dying to get in here.'..... ...