mikepyro

Another angry song? Well this was still decent. The chorus I admit is the best part of it, and you manage to mix some dark and violent images very well, ...

there's no period after Miss, just Ms. there are several moments of misplaced dialogue connecting with description, also there are times where you miss the second quotation mark in your ...

While this is a powerful and emotional piece it's one i've heard dozens of times before and there's no much here t seperate it from the pack. I do like ...

Damn, the reviewer above me shredded this in detail. I'll try my best to add what I can. Oh its fine, don't -- it's there's alot of moments where you ...

There are parts of this piece that really shine, your discusion of love, your more powerful imagery and almost philisophical conversation style of piece, but its so jumbled. I feel ...

As always you remain the only writer on the site that consistantly creates humorous and enjoyable, as well as well written, works. I especially enjoyed the almost storybook tone you ...

Liesonlies, don't bother commenting on stuff you haven't bothered to see. Please, save us. While I disagree as to whether C,S,L is best of the season (Hp7, Captain America, and ...

This piece started great, then got incredibly cliche, then got great again. At least you ended on the great note. Overall this was very solid, the first act of innocence ...

honestly the second draft is a bit of a mess. the thoughts don't fit and the extra sensory details feel painfully tacked on. The original is the far more superior ...

Quite a solid piece. Usually stories of this ilk are overly emotional, bitchy, manipulative in emotion and feature little depth, but aside the vibrant imagery you use mixed with touches ...

usually bring you white roses; I like what they represent, beauty, peace, and innocence. --- cut the ;, replace with period. change comma after represent to ;. The piece starts ...

While I really enjoyed it I won't lie and tell you it was absolutly hysterical or totally awesome, it wasn't. It was good though. I felt you missed alot of ...

There's solid detail and description here. Glad to see another fan of Let Me In as well, but this really does belong in fanfic. Also, since you obviously enjoyed let ...

the snake metaphor doesn't work for me. It's just one too many metaphors and similes in the piece that it distances me from the piece. The strongest points are lines ...

The roadway flailed beneath me but I did my best --line reads a little akwardly, almost sounds like he's driving than walking see her outline, there, (i'd cut the there, ...