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I liked the story, borntoshop. I feel like it's been forever since I read your work. Nice job, as always. :) OK, here are some things I spotted: Everything was ...

Hey, deafwriter. I really enjoyed reading your story. Here are a few suggestions/comments. :) Okay, honestly I didn't really find any huge grammar errors, so good job with that! :) ...

Hey, Viv. I'm going to review your story. I don't know if it will be too helpful, but I'll try. I was so confident, before, before I won. I'm not ...

Okay, I'm here! I remembered, I'm glad I didn't forget. :) So, here it goes: the fire his fingers on mine ignited still blazing through my veins. I think you ...

Hey, Icefire! I'm Colleen, and I'm going to review this for you. I hated it with a fiery passion that I was amazed didn’t burn her. I think this would ...

I have questions, too. In the beginning, the MC is screaming for Hatta. Who is Hatta? Is Hatta the one killing? Or, is it the MC's friend. Also, is this ...

"When is Mommy and Daddy coming home?" Gale asked tiredly. Okay, you can see that I bolded the 'is.' Unless it's just part of Gale being young, you know, little ...

I liked this a lot! It was really interesting. There is some wrong puncuation and a few mistakes. But, other then that, I enjoyed it. Look through the second paragraph, ...

Hey. I can't really do a full review on this, it's pretty long. I'll point out a few things. My sister, brother, and I are twins. Our bleach blond hair, ...

Hey, thanks for the PM. Sorry, I didn't get to this. I was on vacation. I thought I'd just tell you I really liked this part and it cleared up ...

Ohhh, I loved this!! All mistakes have already been pointed out. I really felt involved in the story, and you used my favorite name! Shane, God I love that name. ...

Hey, thanks for PMing me. I'm really enjoying this story. Okay, so I don't really see much wrong and I'm not good at punctuation and all that. I found one ...

I agree with all of the above. I can't nitpick this because it would take way to long. My suggestion is to go to the Knowledge Base and look at ...

Hey, this reminds me of a story I'm writing. Except with a different illness. You've inspired me to work on that after I review this... Anyways, I enjoyed your story. ...

Well, I was in the school library which really doesn't have many good books. I asked my friend to give me a random book and she gave me this one ...