mellophone7

I love this, and I could especially relate to it, too. I don't want to have silence (all the time); I almost always want to have music in my life ...

Interesting. You capture (as I see it) a very complicated relationship from the girl's point of view. A few mechanical things: But Couples fight, Is couples supposed to be capitalized ...

I agree with the previous comment by MissRockers. It tells a story in a simple way. I didn't find any errors in it, although the "Is it?" did seem a ...

This is a really cool piece! It perfectly captures the wish of a human being to be able to swim in the ocean with all of the other creatures. Keep ...

I read your last comment, and it seems like a really interesting way to write a poem. I've never seen one written like that. I loved this, and it was ...

I love this poem. It really touched me, and I know exactly how the person feels. Just one thing, I noticed a few places where two words got squished together. ...

I like how you incorporated the "no sense of time" concept. Just a couple things: Or is it that an African sunrise is more exotic and full of fiery? I ...

Instead of rewriting all of the previous comments and taking up more of your time than necessary, just refer back to the other users' comments, because I agree with every ...

Is there more to this? This would make a very, very good longer story, one that I would most definitely read! :) A few things: Try using italics when your ...

This seems like it could be an interesting story. Some technicality things: there was a sudden up bring of the infamous unicorns. Did you mean a sudden upbringing? the world ...

Pretty good. The beginning started out alright, but then I started to get confused towards the end. The officers also didn't seem that realistic. Like, shouldn't they have asked more ...

I will agree with all of the comments/suggestions so far. I loved reading this. It's a good write that really drew me in very quickly. I could easily imagine it ...

I saw just a couple grammatical errors that I believe several people pointed out, so I will just briefly mention them. To vs. Too Lute vs. lute (is that supposed ...

Oh. My. Gosh. That was the most sincere, heartfelt, beautiful thing I have every read. You wrote about sincere love, without adding anything that made it seem cheesy. Amazing work! ...

Wow. Such a heartfelt, touching song. Wish I could hear the tune. A few blips in the sense of rhythm, but since it is a song, I don't think it ...