Published April 17, 2011
Watch.
Monitor.
Manipulate.
Is that how your mind works?
Annoy.
Criticize.
Destroy.
Is it?
Discriminate.
Ignore.
Forget.
I thought I could trust you.
Manipulate.
Criticize.
Forget.
I thought you were there for me.
Manipulate.
Criticize.
Forget.
I thought you cared.
Manipulate.
Criticize.
Forget.
I guess I was wrong.
Manipulate.
Criticize.
Forget.
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I like the simplistic style of this poem. Minimalist poetry. I also feel that even though it has been made without a great amount of description, everything is conveyed appropriately. In other words i salute you and hope to see many more of your soon to be distinguished literary works.
Bon chance.
You know, I wrote this in like three minutes. Gosh, I can't believe it's actually good.
I was really angry at someone so I just was running on that anger so I published it. I completely forgot about it. Well that shows what happens when I'm pissed. 
-T
I agree with the previous comment by MissRockers. It tells a story in a simple way. I didn't find any errors in it, although the "Is it?" did seem a little bit out of place. Other than that, I like your style! Keep writing!
I like this poem because you really don't need to explain much of anything at ALL. These chosen words give so much emotion. Wow. This is something I have to remember to learn how to do. I tend to have to explain myself in more than a necessary amount of words. I think a lot of people (including me) can relate very much to this poem. We put too much faith in the wrong sort of people! We gotta find our true selves..and our true friends in life!
Good job.
I really like this. It has good descriptions and also good emotion...So Great job with that. i couldn't find any spelling errors at all. Good luck with this and hopefully you will get many many reviews ^^. Keep up the good work I hope to read more from you soon!!! Happy Writing!!!
Soulkana<3
I liked the "is it?" line. I thought it shook things up a bit; I could hear a desperate and angry voice getting higher. But that's just me. I guess it's how you read it, whether it flows or not to you. Anyway, it's a very telling poem, accessible and all... if that makes sense. I like its simplicity, repetitiveness... Sorry I'm not more helpful.
Hi! I like your style, it tells a story in a very simple way.
Really I only have one thing to point out.
"Is it?" doesn't seem to fit with your theme of long-short. You may want to lengthen it to fit better with the rest of the poem.
Other than that, this is very good. It does seem a little cold, but maybe that is what you are trying to convey?
Hope that helps!
Sage