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First of all, good suspense and great twist with Ricio being the monster. Very nice. I liked the detail. There are only a few things that I have to say. ...

I thought this was great! It was cute and I want to find out what happens to the Rubber Duck. Most of this is just a few nitpicks. There I ...

Hey JamesB! Welcome again and thanks for the suggestion. This was great. Turning right down an alleyway, moss on the cobblestones and dirt making it slippery, he heard the men. ...

I finally found your prolouge! I have been looking for it. Anyway. I liked this. I am one for a vague prolouge myself so the questions I am going to ...

Hi Okay... Answers to your questions first. I'm not sure. I think male since the waiter called him Mr. Quarts, but if he looks like a girl maybe his is ...

I liked it but I might have missed a prolouge or something because I was really confused about who was narrarating for a while. Maybe you could clear that up ...

Welcome to YWS, Deelish. I liked this. The problem is that there is a bit of a time conflict. You say it is 1975 but with the thin, work apron ...

Hey Sailor, First of all. I liked how real the story came out. I hope you haven't really lived this but you did a great job writing it as if ...

Hey LittlePetRock, This was cool. Some of the colors were hard to read though. The bird paragraph was fine by me. I liked it a lot. Dog - You promised ...

Hey Teddybear, I liked it and want to hear more. I only saw one thing that I could really complain about. “I want you to call my name and scream ...

I thought you could add something to that part. It seemed kind of short and quick. Which is fine but I want more of the story than you're giving me. ...

[Taryn Collins is nineteen years old. She lives in New York City, going to NYU and has an abusive boyfriend.] [Taryn is sitting alone in her bedroom, sitting on her ...

I really liked this. Normally it's the girl who is in love with someone who doesn't love them. I'm going to nitpick. Jesse stared at the papers that hid his ...

Hey, I could be wrong but if people are dying of lack of oxygen they wouldn't die at different intervals. Maybe a few minutes apart but that's not what I ...

I liked this but I don't know where you are. Is it Greece? I can't tell. Maybe that's just me being dumb. There are lots of spelling mistakes. If you ...