maryletsflyaway

This is really good. I used to write a lot of acrostics, but I was never able to master it like you have with this little piece. Great work. :)

This is not only good, this is very good! Your imagery is fantastic especially the part about licking honey off of bread with dignity. Your writing is raw yet reserved, ...

Mmmmm, this poem is really good. The idea of the apple and the man growing together is quite nice. :D I really have no suggestions. Gooooood work!

Thanks for the comments. :D

Uhm, yeah the spelling...

Thank you all again, I'm hoping to post the next part soon. :D

I've read it and it was quite good!! :D

Well I hope you do, too! I'm sure you capable of wonderful writing! :DDDDDDD

lol thanks

I enjoy this, especially the hint of enternal rhyme in the title itself. BUT, it kind of drags along when you start describing the game of cricket itself. A more ...

Aww, thanks guys. :)

The milk is like "creative juices" or whatever and the children are the poems themselves. If there is nothing to nourish the children, then they will die, be torn apart, ...

Maybe to make it clearer as to what the poem is about, I'll just tell you. I have a bracelet made of your face (I have a bracelet made of ...

I wrote this on May 16 and I was referring to that day when I spoke of "the sun of yesterday".

im gonna be bad and bump this. :/