lyrical_sunshine

orcashadow: thanks for the critique! i didn't realize the ending was confusing, but several people have mentioned it, so i'll try to fix it. yes, she was dreaming, and I ...

hmm...this was interesting...except i still have no idea what's going on lol. maybe you can elaborate a little? i don't know...i'm not sure how to critique this because i'm so ...

thank you guys so much! Aisho - can you tell me exactly which part you were talking about? I couldn't seem to find it. greenjay - i know, i'm not ...

thank you guys so much! you're very encouraging. but if there is anything you see that needs improvement, go ahead and tell me.

haha, i like this! but what is treacle? it just makes me think of Alice in Wonderland....

i really, really, really liked this. i like the way it showed who you are without coming out and saying it. really good.

i really can't say anything that hasn't already been said. there were a lot of run-ons, which made it tiring to read, but the imagery was beautiful, very vivid. i'm ...

oooh, good, you are puzzled...well, just a warning, you will be puzzled until the very last chapter lol. thank you very much for your kind review. it's encouraging.

i LOVED the movie. of course, i've never read the book, so maybe that's why.

*growls* i claimed him LONG before you did!! I've been parading in front of him for a year now, waiting for him to imprint on me. HA!!!

GAAAH!! will someone else please review this? i have to send it in soon you know!!! THIS COULD AFFECT MY ENTIRE FUTURE!!! ok, sorry. i'm just slightly stressed lol.

well, i think everyone else caught the mistakes i saw. your voice is beautiful, i feel like the nomads are real people and the language is one i could learn ...

"instead using his large, skilled vocal chords to project his voice to all the villagers." large and skilled is a bit of a weird way to describe vocal chords. and ...

Brad raised one eyebrow at the Peacekeeper. Somehow he had managed to infuse a good measure of sarcasm into the word 'charming,' so that it sounded quite the opposite of ...

Thank, sunshine, for all your great tips! Heh, yes, Brad's name. His real name is Bradken, but his friends horten it to Brad...does that make it any better? I just ...