lyrical_sunshine

Oh wow. This was so mind-blowingly funny. I just kept wondering what this poor senator is thinking as he's reading this. This piece is totally unique, and I'm kind of ...

Okay, this is my first story to submit, so please critque!! :D I am totally new at this!! I hope you enjoy. Page 1 The harsh wind blew all around ...

Chapter 1: I don't quite know where to start. This is so confusing. I never should have begun in the first place. He was stupid to suggest it. Maybe I ...

This is a very thorough synopsis...but it might be a little too thorough. An agent wants to know the jist of the story - yes, it should be thorough, but ...

Part 1 of 2 “They ought to put out the eyes of painters as they do goldfinches in order that they can sing better.” - Pablo Picasso Sara had her ...

Aflonyddwch emosiynol Cold. Still with my eyes closed, I curled up tight and wrapped my arms around myself. I tried to scrub my upper arms with my hands and still ...

Ooh, you edited! :D I really liked the added descriptions of the people's response to Karenna when they thought she was a Gypsie. It gives us some idea of what ...

I didn't read the book - I just read the spoilers. And I freaking predicted EVERY SINGLE PLOT TWIST in BD. Booyah for me. That being said, I'll probably read ...

I was never able to relate with Bella, except for her hatred of expensive gifts. As arrogant as it sounds, I think I'm stronger than she is. Physically, mentally, emotionally...*blushes ...

First, I agree with Stella - I'm totally floor by your grammar skills. If I wrote like you when I was eleven it probably wouldn't have taken me sixteen years ...

Hmmm...Okay, I'm not going to give you a line-by-line review, because your grammar's looking really good in this piece. :D *nods in a teacherly way* I am going to point ...

I love love love love To Kill a Mockingbird. I didn't think it was dull at all - I had to read it for school and I finished it like ...

In this part of the city, if you stood still, there was no sign of life. The people had punched out from work and returned to their houses. The animals....had ...

To be fair, Firestar's probably right. I doubt he consciously thought, "Muhahaha, I'm going to steal these writers' ideas and become famous!" I mean, original ideas are very hard to ...

A lot of stuff by Ted Dekker is dark and kind of creepy. I recommend "Thr3e," "House," or "Skin." I've heard that "Adam" was kind of freaky too, but I ...