lyrical_sunshine

Man, I don't think I'll be able to keep up the 2 reviews per post deal...I think I'll shoot for 1.5 instead. That I can probably do around school, work, ...

No Jacob never imprinted on Bella. I like Jacob so much better than Edward. I don't like flawless characters that are compared to Greek gods. They just annoy me. And ...

Oooh!! I is so excited!!!! :D :D :D I'm going to add comments in bold, okay? 'Cause it's great, but I did notice some things. Sarran is the most talented, ...

Ooh! You have lovely lovely description. It's refreshing. :D I don't understand what was going on with the bird and the cup. Can you explain that a little better? Was ...

Showing, not telling! Who is this kid? What's the reflection in his eyes? What made his day so bad? Basically what I'm saying is that you need some serious description ...

*sigh* I love reading your work, twit. I couldn't find anything really wrong, but I do have a question. Why did you say Clover was a dog? "See what I ...

EEP! this is excellent! Just a few minor mistakes I saw, nothing big at all. Apparently, the man who said ‘you are what you choose to be’ was a liar. ...

Ooh, yay for more! okay, here we go. As for the first part, it made me cringe. Not because it was badly written but because COUNSELORS DON'T ACT LIKE THAT. ...

*drools over the lovely story* eveyrone else pretty much got all the grammatical stuff, but I had to review anyway. My favorite perspectives: the sparrows, the nurse, and the intern. ...

change "I'd never known existed" to "I never knew existed." It's better grammar. :D other than that, this is great and I'm totally excited to read more. :)

Description, description, description! I was a little confused about the time period as well, and then when you mentioned the Empire, I assumed that it was sort of a fantasy ...

Mostly the only thing I have to complain about is adverbs. Sometimes you use adverbs rather than strong action verbs, and generally strong verbs paint a picture better than adverbs ...

Kristen Stewart is Bella, and I think that was a good choice (although Emily Browning would have been better!). But I don't know. I"m having trouble w/ Cedric Diggory as ...

i LOVE the Little Prince. LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE. Beautiful. Right up there with Madeleine L'Engle and C. S. Lewis and Kate DiCamillo. I should actually go re-read it. Get ...

A Christian is by definition "a little Christ." Christ was all about love and forgiveness and saving grace. So I will openly, outright challenge anyone like Hitler who claims to ...