luna_the_shiekah

For mine, I dont feel this is active enough...something doesn't sit right with me about the way I've done it, so I'll definetly be revising it a bit soon. Again, ...

It took me a moment but I read the title and it hit me. "Troy!" I'm far too lazy to make research but I got the jist of it. The ...

I second theron guard. I assumed the seductress is a succubus yes?

Panic! *dance* I don't have their album or anything but what I have heard I enjoy. Not too bad! Though, I only know the lead singers name. So who's Ryan? ...

This piece reminded me of the movie "The Great Race." PUSH THE BUTTON MAX! ... NOT THAT BUTTON! Not exactly the best rendition but I vote you check it out ...

I read this story on your website and I still love it. Love love love!

Well, this is one of the first fantasy stories to catch my attention in a while. And by fantasy I mean an ACTUAL fantasy story. Very nice descriptions and the ...

*Sits perfectly still* Aye aye sir! *Salutes* ...Oh dang, I moved. Joking aside, I'm pleased to hear there's going to be more of this story :D LUNA

I liked this chapter. The change from Lev's POV to Fleur's. It also makes me hate Lev more and like Fleur better. The flashbacks to Felicion and Fleur when they ...

I'm glad you got a good grade on it. It was a nice piece, could use some polishing. I liked the way you ended it. Simple and clean. :) LUNA

You're right, I DO put too many fragments after long sentences. *Blinks at it and then at her open window of "Snow White".* Hell, I've already done it here! A ...

Interesting take on the effects of Link's shadow being manipulated. That was one of the things I missed from Twilight Princess. Dark Link. Very well written piece. Cuccos for you! ...

It seemed a little bland to me. I liked Caden's character though Catalina bothers me for some reason. Also, their names are too similar IMO. It could use some tightening ...

Err....*Goes swirly eyes at the incest* Yet, I like it. Man I'm a twisted wierdo. I liked the rhyming and the way the exclamation from the sister displays what's really ...

Delightfully creepy. The only error I could find was the mispelling of 'peek', but I'm sure someone has pointed that out already :D