loverr

I feel like the best critique for this poem is just to rethink the words. That sounds like a really harsh and extensive edit, but I do not mean it ...

I feel that the last line of the first stanza reads too long, making the rhyme scheme clumsy, but if you change that line the first stanza will be very ...

I kind of agree with the previous review about the rhyme scheme, but don't cut me down just yet. I find rhyming generally distracts me from the meanings of the ...

You write the way I like to read and I am going to approach this stanza(?) by stanza. i. I like the imagery of the scar, the contrast of frost ...

I thought the second stanza was beautiful for some reason, very raw and honest and I adore raw poetry. I think you could cut the "is soft and low" line, ...

"the kind that's born on trees / and dies in throats" - I love this line(s) I really like the almost dual-narrative you have going on. I feel like I ...

This is amazing command of language and linguistics. I am in awe. This isn't much of a review.

Firstly, I would re-think a lot of the full-stops, I think commas or deletion would make the poem run more smoothly. Secondly, I would remove the last line of every ...

The only thing that seems to make this a poem is the line breaks? I think you could rid yourself of the line breaks and reinvent the piece as a ...

I would agree with a previous comment, "over and over again" is a line that could be cut - the repetition is unnecessary. I find if you are in doubt ...