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This was great! I love that K.C. is completely disgusted with Jamie's character, but Chris, oh-so-serious-Chris, is head over heels for the walking candy shop. Now, there is not much ...

First off, you might want to separate this into paragraphs, seeing as it would be easier to read and would make for a better format. I like your writing style ...

This was so true! I am also a nerd at heart and it is what pretty much everyone calls me (I do like sports too, though). I really do understand ...

Wow, I just... Wow. This was dark and heavy, but it was beautiful at the same time. I loved this- You really captured the good and bad in life and ...

"As she gave head to her regular Mr Groydon how dull from two streets away." I know the italics are her thoughts, but you might want to put dashes or ...

At first I was a bit skeptical and wasn't sure if I was going to read this, because normally 'suicide' and 'humor' do not do well together. I am so ...

So excited to be reading more of your story! I love the direction this is taking and I like that you are keeping a bit of mystery about everything instead ...

That was really good! It was beautiful how you went through the different stages of understanding and the viewpoints from their different ages. I really liked this poem; it, sadly, ...

Ah! I'm really enjoying this story, but I would just like to point out a few things that could use a bit of touching up: "She wore a blue dress ...

This was so amazing! I loved it; you wrote this so beautifully, and I could actually imagine this happening in the books. It was, as it was supposed to be, ...

That was so good! I cannot find any grammar mistakes, which is pretty good for a rough draft. There are a few areas, however, that can be re-worded so the ...

I would like to review your short story on this fine Review Day, so, here we go: "Sociopolitical system is like modern day communist china. The world is industrialized and ...

A few things: "He is dressed in a blue pinstripe suit, with glasses and slicked back hair.... I focus my attention on him. Instead of black like the rest of ...

I loved that! I do not really have anything to criticize. Your grammar seems good, as well as the flow of the story. I thought this was really good and ...

Pretty good so far! Just a couple things... "I can hear their whining even as I write this: 'The G.W. Brimmley Library is home to over one thousand volumes of ...