littlebunny

I love the variations in the lengths of your lines. I have a hard time reading poetry with excessively long lines, or ones that are too short. It still flows ...

I agree with penandsword and the various other reviewers. Why don't you do a bit of editing and rework this piece? I find that when I lose inspiration for writing ...

There you go again, using emotion to paint imagery and coloring it with your words! The one thing I feel the need to critique is your use of punctuation. Some ...

I admit that the main reason I created a YWS account is so that I could reply to your posts. You truly are a wonderful author. Not only do you ...

I absolutely love the first line. Most of the commonly used written language is read left to right- whether that was your aim or not, it's the perfect attention-getter. On ...