lilchoma

This was quite a morbid story, but I rather liked it. The idea of killing someone one sense at a time is something I'd never heard in a story before, ...

ok, Im going to be totally honest with you. This poem was pretty hard to follow. I understand what the poem is about, but I had some trouble understanding what ...

I always hate critiquing poems that have such sorrowful emotions behind them, but once again, off I go on my critique: First of all, I think that the poem could ...

Of the three, the first stanza is my favourite. I say this because it is quite vague, which could sometimes be a bad thing, but which in this case, I ...

I would first like to mention that it was your title which drew me in. Hooray for alliteration. Secondly, I would like you to know that I understood the first ...

I think this should be put in the lyrics section rather than lyric poetry. Please take no offense, but I find that the language in this piece is hardly poetic, ...

Well, I think I'll have to read it quite a few more times before I can actually understand what's going on in this poem. But maybe that's just me and ...

The problem with this poem, at least in my opinion, is that it isn't particularly poetic. It has been put in the form of a poem, with stanzas and all, ...

Okay, so this is a pretty decent poem. I like the idea behind it, but there's some nit-picky stuff that just isn't doing it for me. In the first place, ...

Very well done, Lumi. The imagery throughout this poem is marvelous, and all the words put together are quite pleasant to read out loud. This is my favorite part from ...

actually for me, the first stanza was my favorite :) "I am- That is- What for? Because." it reminds me of what I sound like in my head when I ...

I think that if you are going to rhyme some lines, you should go ahead and rhyme them all. At least, I'm not a big fan of random rhyming. It ...

I rather liked this peice. It was a nice creative take on death, and I particularly like the part about how paying attention is the secret to living well. That's ...

nice poem, I rather like it :) I just love the way you write, especially when I read it out loud, it has a nice sound to it. I can ...

Okay, no. The Perks of Being a Wallflower is most definitely NOT a good book. If you're sick of stuff being sexual and dirty, I wouldn't exactly reccommend that book. ...