lil_orange

Hi, Kinla! I have to tell you that English isn't my native language, so I could be wrong, but there are some minor things in this you might want to ...

Most of what I could critique in this was already said before me. Anyway, I just wanted to let you know that I'm also Hungarian, and it felt familiar how ...

Hi, I'm Orange, nice to meet you! So, let's see if I can help you somewhat... First, I think you should give this a real title, so that the reader ...

Hi, my name is Orange. Welcome to YWS! :) Durrie is right, you have to split this into paragraphs, otherwise it's very hard to read. We need to feel the ...

Hi SitaLon, I'm Orange, nice to meet you! I have to admit that English isn't my native language either, so I'll leave your grammar and stlye to others to correct, ...

I liked your work, but I have to agree with Jetpack on it being too denotative. In the first paragraph you develop your thoughts nicely, but maybe you should give ...