lexy

*shrugs* None for me either x

you were mean about mine but I'm not one to hold grudges... it wasmediocre. Powerful imagery and stuff.

please?

please critique my work!!!!! I can't improve it wothout the comments!

emotional attachment here. I like it though it works. A few too many commas though... but other than that. Great work. Keep it up :D

it was compelling stuff. Can't wait to see the edited version!

How did I do??? Where are the critiques.... ?

I agreed with the above but the ending seemed a little abrupt. Good stuff though x

for your critiques :) lol

I liked this.... But then ending was unexpected. Sugar, just realised that the person above me said that too. Good work though. x p.s No hard feelings?

One of your best so far. I liked the imagery it was strong and the contrast of the sand and stars made sense to me x

i agree with Elizabeth to be honest... I don't have the time to read your delightful entry!!! Maybe some other day :D

hmmmm. ok.

judging by the persons comment before.... they think they could write it better than you??? But in my opinion... I liked it the way it was... and yeah, it made ...

like the style