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Different imagery means different things to different people. We're all unique and individual and what we think about with an image is probably different from others opinions. I can see ...

You people are too coherent for me. I don't really follow this or understand it but it looks like everyone else knows what your saying. i prefered the 2nd paragraph/stanza ...

I like the play on the words morning/mourning as well. Its the thing I spotted that I liked :) Good work! Flowed well and I have nothing critical to say ...

I think as a new writer you showed some good talent in this piece. The format definitey needs some work... and the punctuation. But other than that I think it ...

I like the iambic pentameter. Flows well and is a simple poetic rhyming scheme :-) Good work. :)

she would pull at her hair (tearing at her hair) when someone is stressed they would... I think it works. Although the punctuation is lacking later on! :) keep it ...

Its got great powerful imagery so there is my positive comment. It has emotional feeling and thats great... [/quote] Love is hidden in the darkest of places, lighting up our ...

positive criticism is nice... but actually commenting on the most of the piece and saying it needed changing??? Nope... It wasn't kind criticism. It was "I can do it better ...

This poem works.... short is GOOD.... if it was any longer it would put people off! I think its great... so what if the 1st two lines aren't yours??? Does ...

i liked the use of enjambement (the lines overlapping onto the next sentence) I also liked the lack of punctuation... made it flow better :D keep up the good work ...

puppies? dogs? talking? Ummmm I guess I could sugget to my sister that she reads it....... (she's six) I liked where the story was set though :) if that makes ...