[FYI I deleted the text b/c parents may know about my YWS now. Shame, but they're real strict and conservative sometimes. They don't like sexual allusions and they sure as hell don't care for Rammstein.]
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I like the play on the words morning/mourning as well. Its the thing I spotted that I liked
Good work! Flowed well and I have nothing critical to say
Well done. VG for you!!! lexy x
I don't critique poetry much but I saw 'rammstein'
I don't think I've heard the song mentioned, the only albums I have are Mutter and the album with Du Has in it (I forget what its called...) They're pretty good! I like the song 'klavir' (sp?)
I really liked this line and the play on mourning/morning. Seemed in true rammstein spirit; a play on words!But, anyway! I liked this, gasoline and fire brings such a good mental image, I can literally smell the gasoline as I read this.
I liked it