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Hey, this is Lelu for my first review in a long time. Firstly, the emotions here are clear and concise, realistic and believable. You probably didn't write the prompt so ...

Hello! Lelu here, doing one last big review to get points to release the last chapter of Princess of the Sea. Not that it concerns you. Sorry. Are you new? ...

LOVE LOVE LOVE this. I don't usually find romance this sweet without being unimaginatively steamy. Both your characters are interesting. Also, the part about the hippocampi is cool. I'm curious ...

Very cool. Interesting, easy to read, plotline's easy to follow. There are few mistakes here except for wrong word choices, which I'll point out to improve your future writing, since ...

Hilarious! Your species are realistically created and the universe and galactic travel are feasibly made. Excuse me if I sound like Spock, but I don't think you're going to mind, ...

Hi. This is lelu. Obviously. Firstly, you portray the emotions and cycle of love well. This whole thing is easy to understand. You misspelled the second word but otherwise I ...

Wow! I looove this. With three Os. This is hilarious. I especially like the part about the laptop being mad because you keep hitting it. I should use that sometime. ...

Happy review day! First off, I very much like this. It's really well done, in all respects except for the Big Four. Grammar, punctuation, capitalization, and spelling. It feels a ...

Hi! Firstly, welcome to Young Writers Society. Secondly, I very much like this. It's definitely reminiscent of Edgar Allan Poe. I have no problems with the plot, but it's not ...

Hey, Radrook! This is pretty well done. The dialogue is funny, though at first he sounds too educated. You need an apostrophe after "spittin." Also, you should leave off the ...

Hi! Lelu here, the one who stinks at reviewing anything other than copyediting! Here goes. Firstly, I like this. It's funny. You're not bad at writing guys, even though he's ...

Wow. This is good. I love the city...well, it's realistic anyway. Is this part of a larger story? 'Cause it seems like it would make a good one. Okay, first ...

Hi! Lelu here, reviewing for the one team to rule them all. First off, I think I read another chapter of this once, but I don't know most of the ...

Me again. Firstly, I do like this, especially the other planets. If I ever write space fiction (which I probably will) I'll probably make them all humanoids. Also, you mention ...

Nice! I really have trouble finding problems to review. However, I will do my best. I may need to question a few points you brought up in the story, since ...